Checkpoint by Kit Zheng – Review
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Author: Kit Zheng
Genre: Erotica
URL: Torquere
Price: US$1.29
Other Information/warnings: explicit m/m
Summary [from the publisher]:
Evern [sic] has had a rough couple of days, with his ex-lover leaving him in a very public way, and now his piercings are setting off the metal detectors at the airport. In fact, he’s set off so many bells and whistles that Officer Regan pulls him into a private room for a little inspection of what might trigger an alarm. Will Evern’s [sic] day get worse, or will a steamy encounter make him feel better than he has in a long time?
My review: Ah, a world hyper-vigilant of potential terrorism has wrought a lot of unpleasant things these day, one of them (and the least unpleasant by far) is the long security lines at airports and the surly TSA agents one has to face when something goes awry. And those lines are even worse when all you want to do is leave the unpleasant past–and an ex-lover who publicly humiliated you–behind. What more could possibly go wrong? Well…did you remember to take your Prince Albert and frenulum ladder out before you got in that line? It’s a little to late when Evren Ertegun realizes exactly what set off that metal detector and why Officer Regan is ready to wave his big wand at him.
The more I read author Kit Zheng’s work the more I find little nuances, and this charming story is no exception. It’s a very short story–coming in at under 9 pages–but it is one that is done exceptionally well. While there is little time in so few pages to build hugely dynamic characters, Zheng spends her time wisely, putting enough detail into her protagonist’s past life to give him some depth and some resonance and a personality that makes him appealing. Don’t get me wrong, this isn’t some long drawn-out history with a little action thrown in. This is a nice, slice-of-life story that benefits immensely from the economical use of back story.
Zheng slips in the little details that make up a life, a person. For example, when the alarms first go off, Zheng weaves in that Evren is perhaps a bit past his prime, a very simple addition that lets the reader know how big a change Evren has just undertaken, how he might just be a little lost starting over again. Or when Officer Regan takes him in the back room for a closer security screening, how Evren nervously offers up, My parents were from Turkey. It’s a Muslim country but it’s really…I grew up here, I haven’t even been back. Just that little bit of stammered information adds another layer to the character. I was very, very impressed with how expertly and subtly Zheng was able to mix in so much detail with so few words…it’s all just light touches peppered here and there throughout the story.
Now you can’t accomplish everything in so short a story, and Officer Regan (spelled differently, I know, but I couldn’t help but get a chuckle out of the choice of name) is definitely more thinly drawn. Still, there’s enough there to differentiate him from Evren and to make him likable and appealing. As a result, the brief encounter is surprisingly erotic…because the characters have depth. Frankly, I wish my experiences with TSA had been so interesting.
Another trait I’m seeing now that I have read more of Zheng’s work is the humor that tends to run through her stories. The humor is definitely more in the background here (as opposed to her Roy LeRoy stories) and it gives the piece a slightly romantic, lightly comic feeling that is appreciated.
In the end, Zheng created an engaging, simple story and, wisely, she kept it simple. In a span of about seven minutes, I got some nicely drawn characters, a tiny bit of social commentary, some smiles, some arousing sex and a story that might just be about never being afraid of starting over. If Zheng can blend all of that into nine pages, shouldn’t we expect the same from longer works?

I agree with everything you said in the review of Checkpoint. I really enjoyed this book and also reviewed it.
I’m curious about your tags. I noticed that you listed “asian writers” as one of them – why? The writer says in her bio that she is part Canadian, part American and part Chinese. Just asking.
This is just a follow-up to and clarification of my original comment. I made an assumption that the author is female but I have no information that indicates whether this is true.
Paul:
Thank you so much! This was a wonderful thing to find on my flist this evening, it was a real pick-me-up. I’m so happy you picked up on so many of the little things I tried to sneak in. I’m fascinated by the varying reactions to Regan (and yeah, actually, his name was a joke); he’s more built up in my head, which is why I’d considered writing a follow up to this story, but I really like the story on its own, as well, so we’ll see.
Wave:
Sorry about that, I wrote the bio when I was feeling pretty flip. Which is actually fairly often when it comes to bio writing–I just can’t take those things seriously.
*Grins* Ethnically, yes, I’m Chinese. The thing in my bio was… well, kind of an inside joke.
Hi Wave:
I used the tag “asian writer” mostly because I know that I as a reader actively seek out minority writers and I just thought if someone visited UP and want to search out ethnic writers, such a tag would help them.
I thought about adding “American” or “Canadian” to it…as in “Asian American writers,” but (1) I’m not sure which of the two Kit is (or both) and (2) the broader “asian writers” keeps people from having to look up multiple tags. Now that I think of it, I should probably start using the tag “ethnic writers.”
I hope that makes sense.
Hi Paul
Thanks for the clarification. I was just curious and wondered if you were targeting a specific group in your blog. Makes perfect sense to me. If I don’t ask the questions I never know the answers.
PS Thanks for stopping by and commenting on my unscientific condom survey of M/M writers. Great answers
Wave
Hi Kit
I really enjoyed your story and did a review which I hope you’ll like. My friends are emailing me (separately from from the comments on my blog) to let me know how much they love your story. Great job. Here’s the link to the review http://reviewsbyjessewave.blogspot.com/2008/08/check-point.html
Also, if you have the time, perhaps you could comment on a post I did today on my Lj, here’s the link http://jessewave.livejournal.com/4926.html
Paul
Thanks again for your input. If you want to see the comments on my blog to the same question here’s the link, but I warn you they are really um .. raunchy and downright evil in places. OMG. I never realized what a can of worms I opened when I did the post. Kit you can comment in either location if you wish -
http://reviewsbyjessewave.blogspot.com/2008/08/important-condom-question-for-writers.html